tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3075536000183638139.post2050014057182937420..comments2023-06-15T07:22:17.787-07:00Comments on Michelle Krys: Query Letter CritiqueMichelle Kryshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15435461016171266977noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3075536000183638139.post-5976227124496466012012-09-16T04:48:42.168-07:002012-09-16T04:48:42.168-07:00Nice crit, Michelle!Nice crit, Michelle!Brandy Allardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16233316312236839306noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3075536000183638139.post-64016419366686221042012-09-12T05:56:24.019-07:002012-09-12T05:56:24.019-07:00YAY! I'm so glad you found the critique useful...YAY! I'm so glad you found the critique useful! I wish you the best of luck with querying :)Michelle Kryshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15435461016171266977noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3075536000183638139.post-79023375164710270512012-09-12T05:55:42.899-07:002012-09-12T05:55:42.899-07:00Great advice, Carrie-Anne!Great advice, Carrie-Anne!Michelle Kryshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15435461016171266977noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3075536000183638139.post-38300432586575065492012-09-12T05:55:19.745-07:002012-09-12T05:55:19.745-07:00Haha, whatever that means!!Haha, whatever that means!!Michelle Kryshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15435461016171266977noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3075536000183638139.post-87033517489866703372012-09-12T05:55:06.050-07:002012-09-12T05:55:06.050-07:00Me too, Laura!Me too, Laura!Michelle Kryshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15435461016171266977noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3075536000183638139.post-38439274450827666962012-09-12T05:53:38.542-07:002012-09-12T05:53:38.542-07:00It does, doesn't it? Even more so now that I&#...It does, doesn't it? Even more so now that I've had some distance from it. Michelle Kryshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15435461016171266977noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3075536000183638139.post-49387581658588257862012-09-12T05:33:38.962-07:002012-09-12T05:33:38.962-07:00Thank you everyone for your comments. I certainly ...Thank you everyone for your comments. I certainly agree with everything Michelle and all of you have said. I've pruned. Still not completely happy. But went from over 300 words down to 230. So, it's an improvement. This is my first round of querying, so the second round will include the revision. Also, since the rest of the series are stand alone books, I've removed the mentioning of it being the first of a series.<br /><br />Now that I've read her critiques, the old query looks like a drunk man's babble.<br /><br />Anyway, thank you all for your comments. I will keep all of you posted as to the development of Blood and Shadows. RPhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18416263607001402913noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3075536000183638139.post-10805846407624477532012-09-11T11:57:57.006-07:002012-09-11T11:57:57.006-07:00I got excited when I saw that the book is set duri...I got excited when I saw that the book is set during WWII, one of the eras I've most written about, but kind of tuned out when I saw there are Vampyres. Maybe I'm too purist and old-fashioned, but historical fiction doesn't need paranormal or fantasy creatures to be gripping and exciting! 127,000 words are a drop in the bucket for me, but I agree about not mentioning it's part of a series. I also write series and family sagas, but I know now it's usually not a wise idea to mention that at this stage of the game. Carrie-Annehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05810154378449825641noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3075536000183638139.post-66389511404023860092012-09-10T15:11:57.842-07:002012-09-10T15:11:57.842-07:00BANG BANG ! BANG BANG ! Paulina.https://www.blogger.com/profile/15417525339085472405noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3075536000183638139.post-51646253423743663692012-09-10T04:46:55.625-07:002012-09-10T04:46:55.625-07:00This sounds like a very interesting premise. I wou...This sounds like a very interesting premise. I would definitely read the book! I'm not sick of vampires if they are unique and done well, and your idea certainly sounds unique!<br /><br />I agree with Michelle on tightening up the query. Any word that doesn't absolutely have to be there should go. I just went through a round of query pruning, and I know how brutal it can be. Good luck, because I want to see this book in print!Laura Hughes, MittensMorgulhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00934132671168843593noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3075536000183638139.post-78342359687261396982012-09-10T03:38:58.065-07:002012-09-10T03:38:58.065-07:00Yep, Michelle, you're absolutely right that th...Yep, Michelle, you're absolutely right that the author needs to focus more on the character and how the event effect him. I have to say that the premise does sound very exciting. Amaleen Isonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13686047513429707212noreply@blogger.com