tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3075536000183638139.post5364756475912675083..comments2023-06-15T07:22:17.787-07:00Comments on Michelle Krys: Query Letter Critique Michelle Kryshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15435461016171266977noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3075536000183638139.post-3879073039667626752012-10-09T13:01:44.864-07:002012-10-09T13:01:44.864-07:00Thanks, sistah!Thanks, sistah!Michelle Kryshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15435461016171266977noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3075536000183638139.post-88483439755386082552012-10-09T13:01:33.653-07:002012-10-09T13:01:33.653-07:00Thanks, Amaleen!Thanks, Amaleen!Michelle Kryshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15435461016171266977noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3075536000183638139.post-78198430442242641012012-10-09T13:01:21.485-07:002012-10-09T13:01:21.485-07:00I have a feeling I'm a bit in the dark on Shad...I have a feeling I'm a bit in the dark on Shadow Realms, lol. Thanks for your awesome input, Graham! Really good suggestions :)Michelle Kryshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15435461016171266977noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3075536000183638139.post-13756274558937710502012-10-09T13:00:46.908-07:002012-10-09T13:00:46.908-07:00YES!! Fire away, Paulina!YES!! Fire away, Paulina!Michelle Kryshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15435461016171266977noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3075536000183638139.post-64653087547948070272012-10-04T08:07:37.852-07:002012-10-04T08:07:37.852-07:00Great crit as usual, Michelle. And I'd totally...Great crit as usual, Michelle. And I'd totally read this book. It's right up my alley!Brandy Allardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16233316312236839306noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3075536000183638139.post-74677742088001639272012-10-03T23:43:49.215-07:002012-10-03T23:43:49.215-07:00You've offered great suggestions to tighten up...You've offered great suggestions to tighten up this query, Michelle. :-)Amaleen Isonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13686047513429707212noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3075536000183638139.post-44466999785416044112012-10-03T20:12:28.590-07:002012-10-03T20:12:28.590-07:00Hi Michelle,
Great critique, as always.
I wanted...Hi Michelle,<br /><br />Great critique, as always.<br /><br />I wanted to chime in on the "Shadow Realms" reference -- this has been used many times, particularly as a role-playing game. It also reminds me of Roger Zelazny's Chronicle of Amber series, which deals with essentially shadow realms.<br /><br />I'm not suggesting the whole idea be scrapped, but I would recommend coming up with a proper place name, like "Paris" or "France" (depending on whether the Shadow Realm is a city or country -- not these names of course, just to illustrate the point...) It might well be a Shadow Realm, but I would think it would be more interesting to imply it subtly, rather than beat us over the head with it.<br /><br />My two cents, for what it's worth...<br /><br />Love this critique series Michelle!<br /><br />~GrahamGraham Stronghttp://www.afewstrongwords.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3075536000183638139.post-34176884847559777062012-10-03T16:00:42.200-07:002012-10-03T16:00:42.200-07:00Ooooooooooo I love these!
I have a grammar reader...Ooooooooooo I love these!<br /><br />I have a grammar reader question coming soon.<br />I hope you're not too busy with book writing. Paulina.https://www.blogger.com/profile/15417525339085472405noreply@blogger.com